tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4025264318423694875.post5712390373304703173..comments2024-02-05T10:41:31.777-05:00Comments on I Saw Lightning Fall: "Sum"Loren Eatonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12488412683340389286noreply@blogger.comBlogger22125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4025264318423694875.post-41144615216893253462010-05-06T08:29:05.369-04:002010-05-06T08:29:05.369-04:00Thanks, Paul. I'm not sure it was entirely wha...Thanks, Paul. I'm not sure it was entirely what I expected either!Loren Eatonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12488412683340389286noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4025264318423694875.post-27270723276240891772010-05-05T12:15:15.140-04:002010-05-05T12:15:15.140-04:00wasn't what I expected but I did like it.wasn't what I expected but I did like it.Paul D Brazillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12881642426845398389noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4025264318423694875.post-38292687040244147042010-05-05T08:34:09.013-04:002010-05-05T08:34:09.013-04:00My penchant for odd word choice strikes again! Yea...My penchant for odd word choice strikes again! Yeah, I didn't get to take this one through much revision, truth be told.<br /><br />The "stuff" (for lack of a better word) isn't supposed to be poetry per se. It's supposed to be the part of Jeffrey's life that isn't concrete and quantifiable, the part he's been denying. He doesn't quite sum, which is why he breaks open so easily. Like I said, first attempt at the genre. Definitely need some practice at it.Loren Eatonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12488412683340389286noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4025264318423694875.post-15194539832211315152010-05-05T02:15:57.662-04:002010-05-05T02:15:57.662-04:00I liked it up until the use of "seam" as...I liked it up until the use of "seam" as a verb. That completely threw a wrench in my reading. Can you even do that? I mean, yes, I worked out what it meant, but darned if it didn't throw me for a complete loop the first time.<br /><br />(I was also a bit confused why Jeffery was the one who got to have poetry for blood, since he seems so determinedly mundane. I figured he'd catch the girl in the process of sublimating into words or some such.)Scattercathttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00302815654553659644noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4025264318423694875.post-32430404889170397762010-05-04T08:30:47.953-04:002010-05-04T08:30:47.953-04:00Katherine,
Thanks for reading! Almost all of the ...Katherine,<br /><br />Thanks for reading! Almost all of the math stuff came from graduate level statistics. From <a href="http://books.google.com/books?id=_sOSAXTuy8cC&pg=PA3&lpg=PA3&dq=statistics+for+business+and+economics&source=bl&ots=24i6SHlnrT&sig=QG_CXm6piJt7sDEzPM1JzrPUyKs&hl=en&ei=RhPgS8P7MpD29QS7q-2yCQ&sa=X&oi=book_result&ct=result&resnum=1&ved=0CAwQ6AEwAA#v=onepage&q&f=false" rel="nofollow">right here</a>, in fact. I've actually got a final tonight, which I really should be studying for.Loren Eatonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12488412683340389286noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4025264318423694875.post-47193995043066533192010-05-04T08:28:55.698-04:002010-05-04T08:28:55.698-04:00An FYI for that final bit of verse in case any of ...<a href="http://poetry.poetryx.com/poems/784/" rel="nofollow">An FYI for that final bit of verse in case any of you are interested ...</a>Loren Eatonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12488412683340389286noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4025264318423694875.post-13173909029993730052010-05-04T08:27:00.365-04:002010-05-04T08:27:00.365-04:00B.,
Yup, that's pretty much it. The "sea...B.,<br /><br />Yup, that's pretty much it. The "seaming" is Jeffrey somehow coming to terms with the fact that world may <i>not</i> only turn on what's concrete and quantifiable. The weird shimmery non-blood also fits his statement about poetry and the poem he's reading at the end. I'm sure you know which one that is!<br /><br />Glad you liked it. I think I'm warming to it. It's just so different from what I usually write.Loren Eatonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12488412683340389286noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4025264318423694875.post-10872200412368473872010-05-04T06:17:23.175-04:002010-05-04T06:17:23.175-04:00Beautiful words and woven so well. Made me want t...Beautiful words and woven so well. Made me want to look up definitions of those math disciplines. Loved him piercing the cup to get her attention. I very much enjoyed your story.Katherine Tomlinsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09696623795926663895noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4025264318423694875.post-58857231104977069202010-05-04T00:47:34.013-04:002010-05-04T00:47:34.013-04:00Eenteresting. Very eenteresting. I think it's ...Eenteresting. Very eenteresting. I think it's wonderful, Loren. <br /><br />One question. The feeling of something beginning to seam in his side. This is the healing power of Keats i.e. poetry, yes? And therefore the magical realism, yes?B. Nagelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07620736939701035617noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4025264318423694875.post-88255065336405565682010-05-03T20:41:52.023-04:002010-05-03T20:41:52.023-04:00Ron,
Thank you! I'm glad it succeeded. Never ...Ron,<br /><br />Thank you! I'm glad it succeeded. Never sure how they'll turn out before they're down on paper.Loren Eatonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12488412683340389286noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4025264318423694875.post-23086447577469232522010-05-03T20:40:35.850-04:002010-05-03T20:40:35.850-04:00Evan,
Death -- or is it life? That (to quote the ...Evan,<br /><br />Death -- or is it life? That (to quote the Bard of Avon) is the question.Loren Eatonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12488412683340389286noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4025264318423694875.post-58645391100081378462010-05-03T20:39:48.335-04:002010-05-03T20:39:48.335-04:00Patti,
I'm actually studying for a stats fina...Patti,<br /><br />I'm actually studying for a stats final tonight, believe it or not. The subject matter lands a little close to home. I haven't even gotten to read any of the other entries yet; I'm hoping to do so by Wednesday.Loren Eatonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12488412683340389286noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4025264318423694875.post-45149212619581617122010-05-03T20:19:19.210-04:002010-05-03T20:19:19.210-04:00Fleur,
Gracias, madam. I particularly liked the l...Fleur,<br /><br />Gracias, madam. I particularly liked the line about how Keats died. Glad that one survived revision.Loren Eatonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12488412683340389286noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4025264318423694875.post-67276244806438796252010-05-03T20:18:20.895-04:002010-05-03T20:18:20.895-04:00R2,
Thank you! I wrote a fair amount of it on the...R2,<br /><br />Thank you! I wrote a fair amount of it on the plane as I flew home from a business trip, so I'm just glad it got done.Loren Eatonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12488412683340389286noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4025264318423694875.post-14862601554911471972010-05-03T20:17:38.546-04:002010-05-03T20:17:38.546-04:00Sandra,
Truth be told, I don't know much abou...Sandra,<br /><br />Truth be told, I don't know much about it either -- but I'm glad you liked the story!Loren Eatonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12488412683340389286noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4025264318423694875.post-3397564145881209582010-05-03T16:41:19.603-04:002010-05-03T16:41:19.603-04:00Nicely done. I don't think I could interweave ...Nicely done. I don't think I could interweave math and poetry together so well.Ron Earl Phillipshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12170233782050167504noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4025264318423694875.post-8713810889879308972010-05-03T13:35:20.038-04:002010-05-03T13:35:20.038-04:00Death by poetry. It's like Keats' revenge....Death by poetry. It's like Keats' revenge. Good stuff.Evan Lewishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07620731784654779358noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4025264318423694875.post-74093353364951138662010-05-03T11:58:18.295-04:002010-05-03T11:58:18.295-04:00So many lovely words here. And different from the ...So many lovely words here. And different from the rest. Math never sounded this interesting.pattinase (abbott)https://www.blogger.com/profile/02916037185235335846noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4025264318423694875.post-53666402040660674222010-05-03T10:43:01.782-04:002010-05-03T10:43:01.782-04:00I really liked this. Very beautiful. Your dialogue...I really liked this. Very beautiful. Your dialogue is perfect, btw.YA Sleuthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12371132883359264412noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4025264318423694875.post-45929768882666399242010-05-03T10:15:39.918-04:002010-05-03T10:15:39.918-04:00I enjoyed it. Great work. There are some wonderful...I enjoyed it. Great work. There are some wonderful lines in there.r2https://www.blogger.com/profile/15050444327059086880noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4025264318423694875.post-64131790387677554962010-05-03T09:49:40.866-04:002010-05-03T09:49:40.866-04:00This is very beautiful, Loren! Don't know muc...This is very beautiful, Loren! Don't know much about magical realism but I'd read more.sandra seamanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09786095189231150008noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4025264318423694875.post-91310780396163585632010-05-03T09:19:51.881-04:002010-05-03T09:19:51.881-04:00Post Script: "Sum" is my first attempt a...Post Script: "Sum" is my first attempt at magical realism, so be kind y'all.Loren Eatonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12488412683340389286noreply@blogger.com